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What remains unsaid is haunting.  You are repulsed by your train of thought,
yet realize that the truth may be worse than your strangled imagination.
   reactions telling
   the unspoken - ominous
   ...they have been touched


tears flowing
face contorted, body tensed...
i'm startled by his silence


The playground's edge;
sun-dress and sunshine
playfully splayed.
   Childhood fading, she
   caresses her baby bump.


begging bus fare -
clutching at hems
somber faces


Their marriage confounds;
her best friend,
his lover.
The CLACK gives a reprieve
...old ammunition


diaper sores
no comfort found
in sour milk


Six, no words still -
plucked hair and suckled thumb.
She grafts him in, our new family member
...one day he's gone.


derelict sedan
a parking lot eyesore
sleeps six
Significant edit 11/26/2012
A series of short works, some in Eastern forms, exploring modern pathos and the pressing need for compassion. A trail of tears from my life's experiences.
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Stanza 1: This could mean so many things to so many different people. it is the first of many powerful remarks made in this piece and a nearly perfect opener for it. It draws the reader to to want to know more while still giving a sense as to what the piece is about (loss and a need for understanding and compassion)

Stanza 2: Here I picture a young boy silently crying while a male figure in his life looks on with disdain or with no care at all. I could be wrong but that is how I see it.

Stanza 3: Again I picture the little boy whose mother is trying, but she is more worried about what is to come than what is already there in front of her.

Stanza 4 - 8: I see the little boy grown, almost, and experiencing life for himself and realizing that it is not all flowers and sunshine and that sometimes life really does just suck, but we get through it in the end even if we only have ourselves.
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Deeply touched and greatly moved, I stand.
Thank you for sharing this. :heart:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I've been witness to much sadness in my life.
Thank you for taking time to read, comment and collecting so much of what I do.
All greatly appreciated. :heart:
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As are you. :heart:
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012   Writer
A poignant cluster of memories, treated with poetic sobriety.
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, a deeply personal series.
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:iconthetaoofchaos:
thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012   Writer
Those are the only kind worth reading, IMHO :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012   General Artist
This piece is pure brilliance, yes it is. :heart:
Excellent job, good sir! :clap:
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:iconrlkirkland:
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy to have been able to strike a responsive chord.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and favor it. :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012   General Artist
The pleasure is all mine, dear sir :heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
It's simply a masterpiece.

I would say it is your Magnus opus but for the fact I believe there are greater things in you yet.

All suffering is churned to words. All human experience made articulate.

A worthy, worthy piece.
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